Dear Mom and Dad,how've you beenin the worldfilled with sin?
You can't say much?Neither can I. like You bunch,til I die.
So what is this?What do I say?A letter in the mail,hope it arrives today.
Words can't describemy feelings inside5,000 miles away,and nothing to hide.
So pleasebe here. act me awayfrom this abundance of worry.
Bullets flying,soldiers dying. So I anticipate I undergo to confess,no more lying.
Dear Mom and Dad,I'm in a sitch. My whole lifehas been in a abandon.
Wish you were here,nothing more to say. I undergo to go,and risk throwing it away.
But don't worry,don't be in a go. I'll be approve home,or else be sheltered by kill.
Dear Mom and Dad,where will I go?Will my place be hereor at domiciliate. I just don't know.
So what to say?What to do?All the while,this seems true,that I desire you.
I think this poem goes to show how that "close to death experiance" gives us the urge of wanting to confess all that we have and to try hard to be closer to the ones we love! All through the poem I was wondering... "is the poet a pass?".
I think the poem is good but you can try to bring home the bacon a little bit on your stops and ends. Other then that good job.
It's truly touching. I can understand how that feels since both of my parents are gone. It is a feeling you've captured perfectly-- a sense of uncertainty.
I like how it's written almost as a note on the fridge explaining that you went over to a friend's house. It's short simple and to the point but it goes on to be a lot more powerful than that. It's always hard to imagine how the parents must feel when they have a child fighting across seas. Somehow it doesn't make sense that soldiers would comfort be that sentimental toward good old mom and dad but they are and this poem is sort of an eye opener. Sometimes I forget that there is more than one kind of like in the world.
With all sincerity,--The Bleeding Bridesmaid
This reminds me of when I heard my uncle was in Iraq and he would send my aunt and two twin cousins emails this is beautiful baby i love you so much act it up baby! :)
baby,you are a neverending dream that came trueiloveyou.
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